Real beauty comes from your mind and your heart.It begins with how you see yourself ,not how others see you.
My Table Of Contents
The Bullying at Sulwe's school
Inside Mama's Room
Night and Day
The Next Morning
The most important event is because
The Bullying at her school , students calling her Blackie , Darkly and Night as this triggered and shaped Sulwe's life.
The best chapter is because
Day and Night as they are wonderful role models for Sulwe.
The adventure would be better if
Sulwe confronts the bullies at her school, stands up to them and the bullies learn they are wrong.
My favourite character is because
Mama because of her inspirational parenting . Real beauty comes from your mind and your heart.It begins with how you see yourself ,not how others see you.
My worst character is
The bullies at her school.
Characters I would add
A Teacher to sanction the bullies and call their parents.
Why didn't Sulwe's sister help her in school ?
Why didn't the Day sent the star?
Rewrite the Start
Sulwe reported the bullying to her teachers , they sanctioned the kids ,rang their parents and as a result the name calling stopped. Sulwe sister stood up for her sister and protected her in school.
Rewrite the Middle
The star after it returns Sulwe to her bedroom, visits the bullies at Sulwe's school and educates them about what happened to Night and Day so they will have the same positive feelings and attitudes of accepting people for who they are.
Sulwe marched into school expressing her beautiful confidence and courage by standing up to the bullies.
Rewrite a key event
Day and Night confronted the people who were bullying Night by calling her rude names. There should be comments from the bullies to explain their behaviour.